Comments for A Change In The Weather

Comment on Chapter 63: Out of the night by Rob

Rob — Thu, 03 Jul 2008 12:23:31 +0000

Hi there,

Glad to hear that you’ve read the entire story! Not long to go now I reckon… only another 30 or so chapters…

The two aspects that you mention above are interesting to me not least because I think the marriage of the two elements of magic and mechanics shouldn’t really be possible, but this is a novel, and to hell with reason and common sense!

I suppose the logical approach was to call it a form of ‘Alchemy’ as that art went some way to marry science and magic - two forms which are, in the eyes of the modern world at least, irreconcilable.

Comment on Chapter 5: The Bearded Dragon by Rob

Rob — Thu, 03 Jul 2008 12:12:10 +0000

Hi there Peter,

No - he bent down and picked the map up. I think he was just frustrated that the map was being so useless that he screwed it up and threw it away out of sheer temper. Anyway, he’s got an in-built aversion to rubbish. He’s that sort of a character :)

Glad you like the story so far. If you can get past the next few chapters without giving up, the story picks up pace a lot quicker.

Comment on Chapter 5: The Bearded Dragon by Peter Street

Peter Street — Thu, 03 Jul 2008 11:55:34 +0000

I thought he tipped the map out the window, earlier? How come he’s got it in his room? Or have I missed something - either way, a really good story. Almost a Tolkien-esque way of dealing with environmental descriptions, very vivid and real.

Comment on Chapter 63: Out of the night by the general

the general — Tue, 01 Jul 2008 09:43:37 +0000

I waited until I caught up to the current chapter before posting a comment… I love it so far! Excellent writing - I can’t wait until the next update. One of the things that I find the most intriguing is the combination of magical and mechanical elements - such as the rings and the Guardian.

Comment on Chapter 23: The aftermath by Darkthorn

Darkthorn — Tue, 24 Jun 2008 10:30:13 +0000

“They’d both took a long walk in the wood to try to come to terms with the information. ”

‘took’ should be ‘taken’

or keep ‘took’, and change to ‘they’d’ to just ‘they’.

Like this particular chapter too. Parents are indeed rather stupid.

Comment on Chapter 14: Levitonite by Darkthorn

Darkthorn — Tue, 24 Jun 2008 08:43:57 +0000

I am enjoying the story so far. Just wanted to point out a typo.

“Hillary took up the reigns”

Reigns should be reins.

Comment on Chapter 62: Unquiet slumbers by Rob

Rob — Mon, 23 Jun 2008 22:48:07 +0000

Yes, Thanes are always fat don’t you know ;)

Comment on Chapter 62: Unquiet slumbers by Chad-Writtenfire

Chad-Writtenfire — Mon, 23 Jun 2008 15:38:39 +0000

Nice fat thane there. I’m looking forward to this fight with the demon.

Comment on Chapter 62: Unquiet slumbers by Rob

Rob — Sun, 22 Jun 2008 09:16:41 +0000

Yes, I have decided that it would be much better to concentrate on finishing the story first and worry about grammar and other issues later. My schedule is quite hectic with me trying to fit my writing around work and family and so I tend to post when I’ve hammered the chapter into an acceptable shape. I also tend to do revisions when I have time too, so there’s no real time frame that I stick to.

Many thanks for the offer though. I hope you continue to read!

Comment on Chapter 62: Unquiet slumbers by Regina

Regina — Sun, 22 Jun 2008 04:56:38 +0000

Neat developement, glad to see the next part of the story up!
I’m assuming your silence indicates a ‘no’ to my offer.
Keep on keepin on, and all that.